Journey to Silius - Stage 2 (PRC308)
Nov 02, 2015 bundeslang
NinjaPenguinDan - There's much in this song, I liked the main instruments. Nice variation with the source, the end is a bit abrupt.
Yami - Great introduction. I like the built-up of this song and the sample selection.
Nov 02, 2015 NinjaPenguinDan
Yami, your track was energetic with fairly solid production, and you weren't afraid to stray from the original material. Good job! I really like that synth you chose for the intro. If I'm not mistaken, though, you added some sort of pads to back it up. Which wasn't a bad idea, but I think they could have been just a bit louder. Maybe not for the entire song, but at least the intro and at, say, 2:01. As for the drums, I believe the snare might be a little too loud. Then again, it's mainly the higher frequencies that bother me, so maybe it just needs to be run through some filters or equalizers. I have no idea, to be honest. For the ending, I understand that you wanted to strip it down and keep it simple, but it comes across to me as just a little too bare. I’d recommend reusing the arpeggio from earlier in your song (2:01, to be precise). You’d probably need to modify its chord progression, but I would layer that with the melody you already have, and just let the arpeggios fade out gently at the end. To summarize everything, you already have a good song. It just needs some cleanup before it’d be properly great.
Chalis, your mix is a good start, but I believe you could have built on it more. As a whole, I think you might have relied on the source too much. I do it myself, actually, but don’t be afraid to write some new material. With that being said, I do like the general feel of the song, and I especially like the intro. It sets up the slightly mysterious vibe you have, and it’s not too long or too short. You did well to add the marimba (or is it a vibraphone? I dunno) when it repeats later on. After the intro, I have no real problems with the writing, exactly, but the main issue is that it’s too bassy for me. It might need something in the higher ranges to balance and fill it out more. Personally I’d try making the melody a little louder to fill out the high ranges, then I’d add some instrument in the middle ranges (strings or pads, maybe?). Basically, what you have is written well, but I think you could try adding on a little more. The bass is a fine foundation, but in this case it just might need something extra. The last thing I want to mention is that there’s a lot of reverb on everything. I know that was intentional, but it has the side effect of making everything a bit muddied. When you’re applying the reverb, make sure you check each instrument, and, if necessary, apply the effects separately for every track. In conclusion, your song does have potential, but I’d say it has a ways to go before it’ll be at its best. Keep at it!
Nov 02, 2015 Chalis
Nov 04, 2015 PlanarianHugger
Chalis - I love the ambiance of this song and the layering you did as the song went on. This prevented it from sounding stagnate and boring. The biggest problem with this song that it a majority of the it the source plus extras. I wish there was more in it like the ending. I liked this one.
NinjaPenguinDan - Something about this song didn't click with me. I think it's the rough instruments. I like the creativity with arrangement and the change in style from the source. Not my favorite song though.